i asked God for a bike, but i know God doesn't work that way. so i stole a bike and asked for forgiveness

here's a poem i wrote a few years ago based off of the poem "A Blessing"

I drove beside the pasture
On a road paved in black
White lines were painted on it

In the car I sat
Watching as the horses ran
As elegant as swans

The road continued on and on
In between fields of green
Which seemed to be closing in

On me while I drove
The horses galloped closer
Just inches away now

I reached out a hand to feel
Their velvety skin
And continued on my way

after recently reading it i realised i really don't like the line structure...

so i played around with it for a while and came up with this:

I drove beside the pasture
On a road paved in black

White lines were painted on it
In the car I sat

Watching the horses run
As elegant as swans
The road continued on
In between fields of green
Which seemed to be closing 
In on me while I drove

The horses galloped closer
Just inches away now

I reached out a hand to feel
Their velvety skin

And continued on my way

i'm curious as to which you guys like more.