any suggestions would be greatly appreciated!
Look around and hope I’ll find
Something to make this new
If only I saw
What I now see in you
Who am I kidding?
This was a lie
It will always be the same
No matter how hard I try
Look around and hope I’ll find
Something to make this new
If only I saw
What I now see in you
Who am I kidding?
This was a lie
It will always be the same
No matter how hard I try
I like it exactly how it is.
ReplyDeleteThen again I know nothing about poetry.
what are you going to change? i think it's fine.
ReplyDeletethe line structure needs work.
ReplyDeletethe words themselves are fine.. but it's poetically incorrect.
but thanks :)
i'm starting to like poetry... lol